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Karma: 0 |  | Practice Post : A Day as a Foal!
« Thread Started on Jul 22, 2008, 11:03pm » | ![[Quote]](http://s4.images.proboards.com/buttons/quote.gif) |
Okay here is where me (Hana) and Momo are going to have a practice roleplay post. Both of us are new to roleplaying with horses and if anyone wants to join in and give us tips, PLEASE do so.
Now to anyone who wants to join, basically I just want to practice from the bottom up, so just make up a foal and join in, you don't have to post it in joining.
Setting: A vast meadow is spread out before your weak and small hooves. You stare in awe as your young eyes sweep over the grayish green stalks of grass, marveling at the specks of gold and lavendor that have sprouted up above the meadow grass. It seems to be a sea of grasses and flowers, waving like an ocean as a breeze sweaps over the thin and delicate stalks.
You lift your head, staring at the easily seen horizon off in the distance. A cut-off of pale green and baby blue seems just perfect for the day. You lift your head higher up seeing the baby blue turning more brilliant in color, joining in with a couple of clouds. You watch the clouds, seeing them gallop freely throughout the neverending space. How your excitement grows at these sights, how you wish to gallop with them.
You look to your mother letting out a whinnie of a questions. She smiles at you with her warm eyes and snorts her approoval. Lowering her head, she grips your short hair in her lips, pulling back happily and gently. Not to worry, she'll be right there watching you carefully from the tree-line. Just don't stray to far, not out of her sight or she'll grow frantic with worry.
Go along, young foal, enjoy this freedom of the day, enjoy the melody of the meadow, the birds, the toads, enjoy your youth over all, enjoy life.
Plot: None really. A life as a young and curious foal stepping out into the meadow for the first time. There are no dangers hear, no mountain lions, no wolves, just freedom. Enjoy this practice run and have some fun improoving your roleplay.
Time Range: It starts off in early morning with the mist still floating over the meadow and the dew still wet on the grass.
!!!NO POSTING YET!!!NOT UNTIL TOMMOROW - JULY 23RD!!!
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Karma: 0 | | Re: Practice Post : A Day as a Foal!
« Reply #1 on Jul 23, 2008, 12:21pm » | |
Overall for a foal I think it`s very well, but we all must give and take with tips.
Detail is very good and so is Grammar. But just a tad more when he sees his more, maybe describe her a little bit. A little more on how he feels. Mybe alittle more on what he is doing mostly. And just draw it out as long as you can with detail.
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